Just a small comment initially... shouldn't "stared" be "starred" (i.e. not looking at something intently with fixed eyes)?
EDIT: Glenn beat me to it by one minute!
Some more thoughts... the phrase "with thanks" is repeated twice. Not sure that works. Also, I IMHO think (and it is difficult to be sure without trying it) that if the second block of text ("Presented with thanks..." is to be a sans-serif then it shouldn't be the same weight as the block above the script text.