[SteveB]

So what better way to introduce myself than to say this is me: www.two42.com (well a part of anyway)

This is version 9 of the site - this version introduced the paypal cart - not the best I know, but the cheapest to implement, hopefully will enable some business, but most of my sales have come through 2 galleries and direct to public exhibitions/fairs.

Anyway comments good and bad gratefully received.

Instead of separate thread, bit about me:

Have a technology background, coming to the end of a 2 year career break that allowed me to get this off the ground and now looking for employment in a slightly different field to Digital TV (Bills to pay etc).

I'll help and pass comment where I can!

Cheers

Steve

[Chubster]

Hi Steve..

Only real criticism is the home page...it took me a little while to actually figure out what you do.

Some fantastic prints on there though

Chub

[SteveB]

Thanks for that. It was only after your comment that it hit me I'd managed to loose any images from the home page! bit dumb considering I'm trying to sell... pictures . Made a very quick update, but will try to come up with something over the next few weeks.

Cheers

Steve

[Indizine]

Hey Ive got some photos of Nag Falls and Maid of the Mist too! Might not be as good as yours though

[Maxine]

Hi Steve,

Looks great. The only thing that jumps out at me is that maybe there is some content on your About us that would be better on your homepage just so that your homepage gives a bit of an intro first before jumping into the images

[SteveB]

Thanks Maxine, I'll add it to my list :-)

[CPLTD]

A very nice and clean design bookmarked,

[SteveB]

Well, after comments, I've done a bit of rearranging which will hopefully work out better: 1 click to get to pictures instead of 2 or 3. Bit of a graphics tweak as well.

[glencooley.com]

Originally Posted by SteveB

Well, after comments, I've done a bit of rearranging which will hopefully work out better: 1 click to get to pictures instead of 2 or 3. Bit of a graphics tweak as well.

Looks great, just a small alignment issue in IE6 on XPPro SP2. Main content is just a little too wide and is wrapping down. Can do a screen shot if you want.

Many thanks

[admagic]

Originally Posted by glencooley.com

Looks great, just a small alignment issue in IE6 on XPPro SP2. Main content is just a little too wide and is wrapping down. Can do a screen shot if you want.

Many thanks

Agreed, didnt display for me either, all the text was down belowthe first fold.


First I would like to say, I really love the images.
and I wish you the best of success.

But the biggest problem - is I didnt get it at first
I found it hard for me to work out what the point was - what the driving message was. And this has to hit them between the eyes.

"publishing for a future worth saving"

And particularly

"bringing environmental balance to images"

"images with environmental and social responsibility built in so you dont have to pay the earth"

They are tough statements, that do not make an immediate connection with the ideas that you both contribute money to green causes, and use green materials where you can

In fact the last statement- dont have to pay the earth will be spead read
tosay

ahha!!! this is about cheap pictures, since they dont cost the earth. And one thing you are not doing is selling on price.

The point is here is to use english that a 10 year old would understand.
Which is a point many top copywriters make.

Clever statements generally backfire.

Another point about good copy is, that it must read out loud well, and when I tried it I stumbled.

In english... I think in trying to capture your message in words you have been to clever to the point
that the message is hard to find

Thing is ...if you were sat with someone trying to explain your business
you wouldnt use the type of english you have there...you would use simple colloquial expressions

The message is better summed up with

"When you buy these georgeous pictures, you will help to save our planet"

Not that I would use it directly

That first of all communicates that you are selling pictures - not obvious in your first two tag lines....and that buying them helps the planet. which is not obvious either - it is concealed in more difficult concepts.

So take a good look at the copy.

Get a much better headline .... and then rewrite the copy as simple statements.

The pictures do you a credit,and speak for themselves.

The copy jIMHO just confuses....